Hygiene (Addendum)

It was bloody (as predicted). In fact I think I may have actually ended up with a couple of pre-molars at the front of the mouth. But I think it might just be better for it.

It's a testament to how great my friends are, that I can get feedback on a story so quickly. And such great feedback too! Three opinions and a bunch of cuts (and a few insertions) later and we've got a much more servicable piece. I'm not sure if it's something I'm proud of but I'm really liking some of the turns of phrase. There're a few that you can really wrap your tongue around and set spinning. When I'm reading my work out that I think that's important. I'm allowed to say that because it's unlikely that anyone who listens to me speak tonight will ever read the prose.